Scoring:
Criterion A:
6, It is evident that I am knowledgeable about the text, but some points are not explained thoroughly and lack evidence within the novel. Also, some of the points are unorganized, which creates confusion about the novel.
Criterion B:
7, There is good awareness of the literary features used in the passage, but the significance could have been more in depth. Each literary feature includes examples and explanations.
Criterion C:
4, There was good organization of the whole commentary. It included an introduction, thesis, 3 main points with explanation, and conclusion. Within the explanations, there was organization with a general overview of the literary device, examples, and significance. However, some points seemed to be out of place.
Criterion D:
3, Appropriate language is used, with an adequate degree of accuracy and grammar. Some of my pauses and mistakes hinder the understanding of the commentary. The literary devices could have been more detailed. For example, I just used dialogue, point of view, and chronology without a descriptor attached to each.
Jessica-
ReplyDeleteI actually agree with your self-assessment and your feedback; some suggestions follow:
- Keep looping back to your thesis/statement of purpose for the passage: "First, ________ helps to demonstrate the theme of _______," "Second, ________ bllllahhhhh...." for each section. It is helpful to you and your listener and will help with organization.
- You have some good analysis, but make sure that you aren't just paraphrasing, restating the lines you pulled. Think about it like topic sentence with device/feature (link back to thesis), example, meaning, and effect (and why it's used)